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280.5 – GA, Writing Suggestions from “Negeri Para Heroes” by Huda Rakhman, and Procedural Promo
Hi Haiii…..
For GA, here is the standing date of June 15th – July 12th.
Notes. The above standing is until July 12th, last week. So, for the past week has not been made standing. Remember, the voting period until July 19, stay today.1 user with the most accumulated votes in the time span of June 15 – July 19 will get the physical book "I am No King" volume 1 and volume 2 for free! No need to pay the price either. Ongkir will be borne by the author.
Just like before, there is 1 other condition. Give away will be given to users who vote more than 2000 points in a span of 4 weeks. So, if by chance Number 1 does not reach 2000 points, too bad, Give Away will be canceled. Wkwkwkwkwk
Then, continue to the promotion section as well as the surgical chapter. So, the Author who has sent a chapter to be dissected is Huda Rakhman, author of “Negeri Para Pahlawan”. For additional information, this is the second experiment, second attempt, the author in question tried the procedural promo in I am No King.
Sent for dissection is chapter 30 – Karkadan. The author in question has received a complete revision, edit, and comment as obtained from the editor. The features shown in this surgical chapter are only a small part.
And, don't have to lengthen anymore, let's start the surgical chapter.
1. Dialog Tags
“Is it possible for these Karkadans to attack because they are distracted by our aura fight?” Ether asked Elon, trying to find an explanation.
“That's the most likely thing. They are affected by the effects of the suppressive aura we emit because these Karkadans also produce aldefos.” energy Elon gives a brief explanation that Ether immediately understands.
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The above is the original from Chapter 30. The first discussed is a new thing, not discussed in the previous self-edit chapter, namely dialog tags. Dialog tags are written at the end of a dialogue to explain who is speaking. In the example above, the dialog tag is:
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Ether asked Elon, trying to find an explanation.
Elon gives a brief explanation that Ether immediately understands.
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Dialogue tags are not a sin, but, unfortunately, their use is often out of place, inappropriate, or even excessive. New writers often think of dialogue tags as a safe step, but in fact this backfires.
Most importantly, of course, the author is able to show who is speaking and what the intent of the conversation is without the use of dialogue tags. Suppose
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“Is it possible for these Karkadans to attack because they are distracted by our aura fight?” Ether asked Elon, trying to find an explanation.
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Dialogue or speech character Ether has shown that he asked. So, writing captions asking questions on dialogue tags is something redundant, redundant, repetitive. It would be better if this section tag dialog is omitted. However, for the back, it can also be removed. Wh why? Because it was clear the character of Ether asked to find an explanation. Why ask me if I'm looking for an explanation, right? But of course there are exceptions. But then we go to the dialogue after that:
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“That's the most likely thing. They are affected by the effects of the suppressive aura we emit because these Karkadans also produce aldefos.” energy Elon gives a brief explanation that Ether immediately understands.
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Here, the figure of Elon replied, giving a brief explanation. Without needing to be written or explained, the reader already knows. This dialogue is also repetitive, repeating information. Then, at the end, the tag dialog writes “which is directly understood by Ether”. This is not recommended. The focus of the dialogue tag is to provide information about the work or activities carried out by the perpetrator, not the interlocutor. So, minimize writing other characters' reactions to the tag dialog.
It would be best if we knew who was speaking without the dialogue tag. The way that experts are is that each character has its own characteristics of speaking. This can be done by adding typical writings or sayings such as “kan”, “ya”, etc. However, that character has to be consistent, say it all the time. If in the manga, think of it like a cat character always says “-nya”.
This method can be used easily when writing in Japanese, Korean, and Chinese because everyone has a different way of speaking, such as rough, normal, and polite. However, unfortunately this method is difficult to apply to Indonesian novels because everyone speaks normally. There is one other way that we often do in everyday life, calling the name of the opponent speaks. If all the advice is applied, it will be like this
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“Elon, is it possible that these Karkadans are attacking because they are disturbed by our aura fight?”
“That's the most likely thing. They are affected by the effects of the suppressive aura we emit because these Karkadans also produce aldefos.” energy
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Since there are only two people in the scene, Ether and Elon, we immediately know that the first one to speak is Ether because he called Elon. And, the flow of reading and talking is also more flowing because there is no tag dialogue.
Should dialog tags not be used? Of course not! Dialog tags can be used. Dialog tags are usually written in the middle of the dialogue, when the person speaking distracts the other person, or prepares to explain, or just pauses. Suppose
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“Elon,” Ether calling. “Is it possible for these Karkadans to attack because they are distracted by our aura fight?”
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The dialog tag is placed in the middle to pause, indicating who the person is asking. Generally, this method will be much better if used when the character speaks more than 2 people. If it is only 2 people, there is no need.
However, there are times when dialogue tags are also used even if the character is talking only alone or alone. The two examples are usually used when speech and heart intent are different. Suppose
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“That's the most likely thing. They are affected by the effects of the suppressive aura we emit because these Karkadans also produce aldefos.” energy Elon explained, though reluctant.
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The first impression is that Elon is a good person because he wants to give a long explanation. However, the dialogue tag indicates that he is actually Reluctant. Why reluctant? It depends on the story. It could have been that this Elon figure was upset, but he could not keep quiet. Or some other reason. That's the author's choice.
So, the author gets this term from an English writing site. However, this cannot be translated into Indonesian. Therefore, the author still uses his wife from there. However, the practice can be obvious author. In essence, if this sentence is omitted, the meaning of the sentence is still visible and can be conveyed properly.
Let's look at the example of the following sentence
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They stood around Ether, encircling him in the middle
They stood around Ether, encircling him.
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In the above sentence, the filler used is “in the middle”. In this sentence, “they” circles Ether. From the word around already gives the picture that they are around the character Ether. And, with just the addition of the word besieging, it indirectly gave the picture that Ether in the middle. So, the position of Ether has been explained by the words “engitir” and “memungnya”, said “in the middle” is no longer needed, as shown in the second times.
So let's continue with the next example.
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Elon was also looking at Ether with a smile on his face.
Elon also looked at Ether with a smile.
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In the second sentence there are 3 filler words, namely “sedang”, “a”, and “in his face”. Kata “Mengatap” already explained that “ character is doing”, so there is no need to see. Then, the word “smile” is also not suitable for use. Wh why? Because generally the new number is explained that more than 1. If it is only 1, there is no need. In addition, are there “two pieces of smile”? So, it is also worth noting the couple he said.
Then, lastly, on his face. It's pretty obvious anyway. The point is that a smile is on the face, not anywhere else, so there is no need to write “ on his face”. Unless there is an important significance
“The mouth is smiling but the eyes are not.”
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Okay, I think that's all that's shown is enough. The most frequent writing mistakes of the Land of Heroes are the two things above. Therefore, these two things need to be considered in detail. And, if you are curious about what is edited, please check the following screenshot. In the ms word file sent, the author gives many comments and complete edits. The total number of words is about 1100. And, if you use the services of a freelance editor, stay times 50 rupiah per word. So, the author has saved money 55,000 Rupiah to get the advice and direction.
Writing advice on this chapter in collaboration with Huda Rakhman, author of “Negeri Para Pahlawan”. Once upon a time, an asteroid came along and changed lives in the world giving rise to the power of element control, changing people's lives. The concept is similar to I am No King. Glimpse. Then, what's the difference? You can check directly to “Negeri Para Heroes”.
Premisely, in fact, the Land of Heroes has potential. However, there are 1 drawback that might make the reader will skip this story. “The Heroes of” has a concept like a printed book, not ********. So, in the beginning, it gave a lot of information. If you want to read, the author may suggest starting from chapter 4 or 5.
However, the author can say, the writing error of the Land of Heroes is at the bottom level. The author in question already has decent writing quality. I am No King before going through the self edit process is also as severe, or perhaps more severe, hehe.
And, for other authors who want to get free editing services as well as promos in I am No King street approved (not promos in the comments), such as the Land of Heroes, can read the procedure.
The question is simply send 1 chapter (maximum 2,000) words to the author's email. However, there are conditions. The conditions are easy:
1. BANNED BAPER.
Editors are sadistic jobs. If receiving edits from fellow authors is already baper, do not expect to face the editor.
2. A prepared chapter done editing is shown in I am No King
So, because this is for learning together with other authors about the writing process, the concerned must be willing if the submitted chapter will be dissected writing on I am No King. In a way, this will reveal the bad side of the novel. On the other hand, the novel in question will get free editing (remember if the services of the editor are normally not free) as well as free promos.
Yes. This is a new promo procedure. What reciprocity should be prepared? Well almost the same as before. Among those concerned want to make a promo chapter or vote to I am No King. For the promo chapter, it is up to you to make a written surgery as well (as revenge), or review, or whatever. Whatever.
However, do not forget that the writing is read by many people. If his revenge only vilifies I am No King for no apparent reason, believe me, it will backfire. When the author has done editing on the chapter, the concerned is actually demonizing I am No King without basis. The reader will assume that the concerned return milk with tubal water. However, if accompanied by a logical and strong reason, then the reader will accept it.
If you want to be safe, do the surgery chapter I am No King only. So, the author edits one chapter in question and the corresponding edit one chapter I am No King. If it feels complicated, can make a review or a short promo in the announcement chapter. If it still feels complicated there are other alternatives.
The easiest alternative, if you do not want to bother, just leave 500 points for the vote I am No King. However, this vote will not enter into the Give Away calculation. Hehe.
Then, this is what matters. Author ONLY does 1 chapter editing per week. Who is fast (and qualified) he can be. The procedure demands are as follows:
1. Email chapter that you want to dissect to zevenking@gmail.com in the form of ms word
2. The first email that enters and qualifies will receive confirmation
3. If there is no confirmation within 24 hours\, proceed to the second incoming email
4. Deal making (surgery chapter I am No King\, review\, or vote)
5. The person concerned completes his obligations
6. Author email back ms word that has been given editing and comments
7. The surgery was performed in I am No King
Again, remember yes, 1 chapter maximum 2,000 words in the form of ms word. More than 2,000 words would be author reject. Files sent pdf will also be author reject. Hehe.
And, if there is still a promo in the comment field, get ready to comment “F**K OFF!”. wkwkwkwkwkwkwk
Remember:
“Write, Edit, Publish”
