I Am No King's

267.5 - Another GA announcement, Promo, and Neat Sentence Writing Tips

Hi Haiii…..

Hello everybody. As usual, the author will make an announcement at the break of several chapters about GA and Promo. And, continuing last week, there will be writing tips and tricks as well. In addition to announcements regarding GA and Promo, the author will give you a few tips and tricks to make efficient and neat sentences.

Before that, maybe you are curious about the sudden appearance of the Ami. However, actually, the existence of Ami had been mentioned in the previous chapter. Has anyone noticed? Probably not because it includes the initial chapter. wkwkwkwkwk

Okay, first of all, here is the GA announcement of the physical book I am No King. Here's the announcement......

Congratulations to Angel Syahfitri Fitri. Finally a winner after last month's stabbing. Hehe. For details, please send the social media info used to the author yes. It can be FB author or IG author. With this announcement, the third Give away is officially over.

Along with the closing of the third period, the fourth Give away officially began. Give away physical books will be given to 1 user with the most votes. The third Give away period is June 14 to July 19 (5 weeks). 1 user with the most accumulated votes in that time period will get the physical book "I am No King" volume 1 and volume 2 for free! No need to pay the price either. Ongkir will be borne by the author.

And, just like before, there is 1 other condition. Give away will be given to users who vote more than 2000 points in a span of 4 weeks. So, if by chance Number 1 does not reach 2000 points, too bad, Give Away will be canceled. And, as it turns out, the fourth Give away period has already begun.....

Wkwkwkwk.

Again, the author emphasizes that give away does not give an advantage to the author. For users who have got a book, if read on the front, preface, and closing words, you will read that the proceeds from the sale of physical books I am No King will be donated to the orphanage. But, because it is not sold, so per Give away will make additional author donations to orphanages.

How much is donated per book? Hehehe, secrets.....

Maybe someone commented on why they want to donate just have to give away. As was written in the previous announcement, the author writes as a hobby, just an author for fun, not as the main income. Without the physical book I am No King Author himself has become a regular donor orphanage. So, = physical book additional donation, just increase the donation amount, only one way to add fun in the author of writing the story, no more.

Once again, the author congratulates Angel Syahfitri. And for GA period four, the author will choose 1 user with the most votes in the period June 14 - July 19 to get give away physical books I am No King Volume 1 and Volume 2! Free total. Free ogkir.

　

　

Then, after Give Away, the author again emphasized the procedure if you want a promo in I am No King. Please read. And, if there is still a promo in the comment field, get ready to comment “F**K OFF!”. wkwkwkwkwkwkwk

And, finally, following on from last week, tips and tricks make sentences neat and efficient. Directly, here are tips and tricks that the author can provide.

1. Learn back when the word “di-“ was split or merged.

For some authors, this is considered basic. However, believe me, there are writers out there who have not been able to distinguish when to combine the word “di-“ and when to split. And, for those who cannot distinguish, believe that you are not alone. However, just because it is not alone, does not mean to be a reason not to develop or learn.

Basically, when the word in- meets the verb, it is merged. Yet. If you meet the word place, separate. Example:

　

Gave, spanked, eaten, kicked, separated, merged

Where, above, below, in Surabaya, there, here, in front

　

It's simple, but the impact is quite large. Wh why? Because a minor writing error like this can break the rhythm of the reader. Readers will think “kok spliced? How separated?”. Indirectly, this will be an intervention. If most of the time, the reader will get bored. Bored = less reader.

2. Do not start 3 sentences with the same word.

This suggestion is similar to last week's advice, regarding word similarities. Although there are different sentences, there are still limitations. And, 3 is already considered too much. In fact, some top editors assume two sentences starting with the same word are enough annoying.

The best thing is that each sentence starts with a different word. Here's example.

　

Saria ran towards the laboratory. Saria ignored Silence's words. Saria did not want to believe him.

Vs

Saria ran towards the laboratory. He ignored Silence's words. Saria did not want to believe him.

　

The above are two slightly different examples. Different only in the second sentence, the first kept on using Saria, the second replaced Him. The second example gives a more positive impression because there are variations in word selection.

Basically, the repetition of a word at the beginning of a sentence is a tongue twister. This makes the reader unsure whether he has moved to the next sentence or is still reading in the same sentence. The effect is also the same, making the reader pause, ascertaining his position, ruining the reading rhythm. Word variations at the beginning of the sentence convince the reader that they have indeed moved from the previous sentence, not running in place.

Although the above example is good, if you can be honest, the author feels that the sentence is less than optimal. For the optimal version the author version will have a relationship with the next suggestion.

　

3. Koma\, playing with fire.

In writing, according to the author, commas can be likened to fire. If you use it wrong, your sentences will be messy, awkward, and not easy to read. However, if appropriate, you will find a way to concoct beautiful and readable new sentences. And, as with fire, there are 1,001 different ways to use it.

Some authors use commas just to mention a few things like this, that, and others. However, in part, using commas to give a little pause at the beginning or middle of a sentence. Other authors use commas to combine two sentences with the same subject. There are also those who use it for affirmation, like this.

There are many ways to use a comma. You can search it on Google. In fact, indirectly, such commas reflect a person's writing style. However, as written at the beginning, if you use it wrong your sentences will be awkward and messy. This coma can burn you alive. Not a few acquaintances of my editor protested because of the author who originally put the coma.

For commas, the author cannot give you much advice other than to learn and try. However, at least, there is one basic rule in writing these punctuation marks. A comma should appear if a connecting word is placed at the beginning of a sentence.

The connecting word that the author means is however, although, in fact, etc. If you are aware, you will see that a comma will appear behind the conjunction placed at the beginning of the sentence.

And, additionally, the author wants to optimize the previous example sentence with a comma. However, as the author writes, commas can be used in various forms, for example

　

Saria ran towards the laboratory. He ignored Silence's words, not wanting to believe her.

Saria ran towards the laboratory, ignoring Silence's words. He doesn't want to believe her.

　

The two examples above have the same essence of events, but have different impressions for readers and writers. Why is the effect different? Because indirectly, the chronology of events is different.

The first is the merging of sentences combined at the back. This writing gives a chronology of events like this: Before running, Saria had heard Silence's words. However, he ignored the remark because he did not want to believe it.

The second example combines two sentences at the beginning and separates them at the end. Using this example, the chronology of the incident is: Saria ran as Silence spoke, ignoring her speech. Saria did this because she did not want to believe Silence's words.

Which is right? Both are right. Which is better? It depends on the sentence before and after. As the author explained, a comma is a fire. If it's right, you can get him something great. If wrong? You're burned. You really have to practice often.

　

4. Reduce using the word “very” or “really-really”

The author says cut back, not avoid it completely. Basically, the word “very” is used to indicate something more. However, in writing, this forces us to spend a quota of 1 word. In fact, as explained last week, the quota of words in sentences is limited. When this happens, it's time to look for synonyms. And again, often, the word is very impressed. In fact, even if the word “very” is omitted, the core of the sentence is also the same. Go straight to the example.

　

Saria was furious when she saw her daughter lying limp.

Saria was angry when she saw her daughter lying limp.

Saria was angry when she saw her daughter lying limp.

　

The first example is a commonly used, very angry one. Is this writing wrong? No, because Saria was angry. However, if the very word is omitted, being the second example, is the point different? No, because Saria is still angry.

However, word addition greatly increases the number of words. The more the number of words, the longer the reader holds his breath. This makes the reading pace slow down. The effect of “marah” obtained is reduced. Only by the word “marah” without “very” alone can convey the intent to the reader. This makes the second sentence more effective or optimal.

However, for sure, there are writers who quibble “if only angry, less feel,”. Therefore, the author adds a third alternative that is the next level of anger, anger. With the word “murka” the author can already convey a message to the reader if the anger Saria more than usual.

One word “murka” is equivalent to two words “very angry” or even more. In fact, there are some people think “murka” is the peak of the word angry, the level is already “amat very angry once”, four words.

Another example

　

Silence was deeply saddened when she saw her daughter not moving.

Silence was sad when she saw her daughter not moving.

Silence languished when she saw her daughter not moving.

　

Here, the word “sadih” is enough for some editors. However, for the author, this does not give a deep impression for reading, so it takes the word “very”. However, there is the next level of writing “ very sad”, which is languishing. Of course there are alternatives to languish like “hancur” or others. However, in essence, a single word that is a blend of two or more words has a stronger effect and impression than the word “very...”

And, this also applies to the word “ really-true”.

Even so, the author himself still uses the words “very” and “ really-true”. However, the author uses the words “very” and “ really-” not to give a strong impression. The author uses these two words to dramatize, emphasize, and make the reader hold their breath longer.

Oh, you know, you know. How to hold your breath longer? He said last week was bad. Well, for long and short sentence settings, arguably is an advanced writing technique. And, because the tips this week are enough, the author has already done it. For more tips, especially on setting short-sentence lengths, look forward to next week.

And, for writers, remember!

“Write, Edit, Publish”