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Ave's Pov
I still haven't been allowed to go to college yet by Eyang Yaya. I finally got a job to take care of my finances in the office by my father. Here I mean in the office there's only me, Salim and a few employees. Dad and Eyang Yaya are out of town buying things.
Salim was alone on the computer. My job was done half an hour ago. I glanced at him so he could see me that I was bored. Ah basic Salim does not care..
"Mbak Ave, someone is looking outside" said Mbak Yuti receptionist.
"Who's looking for Ave, Ms Yuti?" No one's been looking for me in my dad's office.
"Mbak doesn't know. They're friends of Ave's. There are two people. His names are Ayu and Rani," Mbak Yuti said of the names.
"Oh them. Just ask to come in, ma'am."
"Good Mbak Ave. I'll let you in."
"Oh, yes Yuti. Buy food and drinks outside. Thank you, yes, Ms. Yuti," I said that Mbak Yuti bought snacks for the Rani.
Ma'am Yuti smiled and walked away.
They must have missed me.
"Ave ...." Shouted the two of them in my room.
I showed my fingers to my mouth to be quiet because the employees here are on serious work.
"When did you go to college? I've lost weight with you, Vel," said Rani as she hugged me.
"Yea at most you miss the same food," Ayu timpal nudged Rani's arm.
"Both." Rani Laughter.
"Hush....." Salim told us to be quiet.
"Oalah lu. How's Lim doing?" ayu asked as she stepped onto Salim's desk.
The one being asked was just shaking and answering as necessary. If Salim is already working at the computer. Don't expect us to talk.
"It's not good to talk to Salim," said Rani who nods Ayu.
"Let Salim work. Let's go to the front page. There's your favorite Cilok and Cilor, Ran," I asked them.
I could see the hungry face of Rani who seemed to want to eat anything.
"Heaven...." Call me slowly.
"What's wrong Ve?" He didn't see me.
"When it's over, Ave goes home."
Salim paused for a moment and stood looking at me.
"Ave sick?" ask with worry.
"No. Ave's job is done. Ave's bored," I said.
"Yes, it's gonna be a minute. Salim was almost done," he replied patting me on the shoulder.
"Me and my friends are waiting outside."
Salim just nodded.
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"What do you think, Bagas?" tanya Ambar saw his son moody.
"I'm sorry Bagas, ma'am. Because Bagaslah make adek Ave like that." Apologize to Ambar.
"Not to think about it again, Bagas. We don't blame you, son." Ambar tried to calm Bagas down.
"Because I don't blame Bagas makes Bagas even more guilty."
"What about dad? Even now I'm still mad at Bagas."
"Yes Bagas knows for himself, ma'am. From the way you talk to her eyes."
"Your father has forgiven you, son. It's just that your father was embarrassed to tell you." Says the mother gently.
"Let's Iyo. Sing dianomapake your mother is really. Your father ae sing isin. Kowe lan your father podo hard fisting."
"Try if only Bagas was not angry with his father. Then it won't make Ave go blind. Bagas until now is still guilty, Mom," regretted Bagas held back his tears.
"Don't cry Bagas. That's part of the past. Let it be a lesson for you" Ambar said wisely.
Unconscious of them. Ave and friends heard it all.
"Mother. When is kowe ning kene?" Eyang Uti was surprised.
"Sorry mom, eyang. We say goodbye first" said Ayu and Rani who did not eat at home.
"Mother, is it true that Bagas' kangmas made Ave blind first so that he sacrificed his mother Salim?" tanya Ave held Ambar's hand asking for an explanation.
Bagas said nothing. He felt a deep sense of guilt. Ave cried as she listened to her mother's explanation. Ave did not expect all this time Bagaslah who made him fall and experience blindness.
"I'm sorry Bagas, Dek." Bagas rested under begging for mercy.
Beyond a doubt. Ave did not scold her brother. He immediately hugged his brother. Crying in her brother's arms.
"Ave forgave kangmas. Ave understood why kangmas are like that. Ave doesn't blame the kangmas. So don't feel guilty anymore, kangmas?" Teach Ave gently.
Bagas who had been a strong man instead cried in his sister's arms.
"Ih kangmas is crying. Later found out about Dian loh," he ridiculed jokingly.
Bagas even more loudly crying. It was as if the burden that had been tormenting him had been released.
"Don't ana what yo? How do you cry?" Asked Eyang Yaya and Brata who had just arrived from the city in surprise.
Bagas hugged his father tightly. Brata was confused.
"Dad, forgive Bagas all this time."
"I've been forgiving for a long time, son," Brata said, patting her son on the shoulder.
This afternoon made Bagas feel calm after everything was revealed. There is no such thing as guilt that always looms over him every night.
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"Congratulations,....." Call Ave with a spoiled tone.
"What's wrong Ve?" Reply Salim who always studied in pendopo.
"Hm ...."
"Aja by the way. Salim is horrified."
"Ih Salim this loh. Habit if invited to talk never want to see the interlocutor," snorted Ave annoyed while holding Salim's head facing towards him.
Salim looked confused the more my face looked.
"That's donk. It's handsome." Praise Ave for brushing her hair in front of Salim's forehead.
"Oh, Salim, how's your business with Uncle Husni?" continue by asking.
"Tomorrow Salim will go to court."
"Is Salim ready to lose everything?"
"Salim's ready to lose that legacy, Ve. Let them take all of grandfather's inheritance. Just so they don't bother your dad and your family anymore, Ve."
"Ave will always be with Salim. Whatever decision Salim made. Ave and family will always support Salim."
Tumben Ave mature.
Salim smiled at the words of his little lady who had become a woman. Salim is grateful for Ave who is always on his side.
\=Connect\=
Here the conflict that arises is indeed a little. I don't want to create much conflict. Make dizzy. Wkwkwkwkwk
Oh, yeah just a few parts to the ending. Yes I admit this story is less exciting but who have a story even eager to read it.
Remembering the past they say.