ME, YOU, And The Light Novel Book

Episode 30: Lack of Novels by Manda

After a while, we finished each of our bread. I looked at the note paper I made last night. Manda then began to say to me:

"Ok Ray, so I want to ask for an explanation of the note you wrote this yes but if it can be as short as possible and directly to the main point yes, considering the break time is also almost over. "said Manda pleading with a polite tone towards me.

"Yes, yes Man I will explain it as briefly and clearly as possible, but later if you want to know more clearly can ask via chat WA to me yes."I said in a relaxed tone in response to Manda's plea.

"Thank you for the help, Ray, I'd like to be repotted with me."

"Ah dgga papa really, I also so all of you learn to make corrections to my own work."

"Ok, if that's directly to the discussion of Ray's first point." said Manda begged me to immediately start the explanation.

"Yes Manda, that's why we will first discuss the first point that I think you should correct again is the use of punctuation in the text you write."

"Ehmm, keep the punctuation mistakes I made in which part?, can you be clear again with Ray." asked Manda asking for details from my statement earlier.

"Well Man, the most common punctuation mistake you make is in the use of punctuation in the dialogue sentences between characters, and, where you still seem to be hesitant in using punctuation marks such as commas, exclamation marks, and other punctuation marks in the dialogue between characters in your novel."

"Oh, so the use of punctuation is very important for dialogue in our stories, why is it so Ray? "asked Manda enthusiastically while looking at me curiously.

"So this is Man, why punctuation is so important for dialogue in our writing because dialogue that does not have punctuation or tone is the same as a character who lost his soul and emotions, in addition, the use of punctuation marks that are not appropriate can also make the reader confused in understanding the tone of speech of the story character." said I provide an explanation with a relaxed tone to make it easier for Manda to understand it.

"Ehh!, it turns out that punctuation in the dialogue is very important yes, I think that important is the same quotation marks at the end of the sentence doang. "said Manda with a surprised tone to hear my explanation.

I could only smile a little at her, seeing her cute surprised reaction. I had not spoken a word to him, he had already asked for my explanation by saying :

"So far, what do you mean by the title that is not right here how ?"he said while pointing to the second point of the note paper I made.

"Oh, that means the title you use is too long and hard for readers to remember."

"Ah time anyway, isn't the Revenge of Revenge on a Detective Person a good title huh? "said Manda who did not seem to accept my opinion and asked why.

"I think the title you wrote is too long and difficult in the inget Man, maybe if you abbreviate the title so Detective Revenge the reader will be easier to know and remember the title of your novel."I said in a polite tone explaining the shortcomings of his novel title Manda.

"Hemm, you really are Ray, the title I made first seemed to be an extension." said Manda in a relaxed tone while rethinking the truth of my opinion just now.

"Don't you feel that way too?" ask Manda to reassure her feelings about the revision of her novel title.

"Yes Ray, that's why I decided to change the title according to your advice." said Manda with a firm tone after setting the feeling to change the title of the novel.

"It's good, if you know the importance of a title."

"Yes Ray, thanks for the advice, yes, oh yes can I ask you something? "

"Can you ask me what? "

"So like this Ray, if you think a good title is really important for my work, then why do you write this in the second point and not the first? " manda said in a curious tone while waiting for an answer from me.

I thought about the question so well that my heart said:

"Hemm, it's also true that Manda said yes, why the title I put in the second point if it really matters, huh it looks like I have to improvise to answer this question."I said in my heart as I stared at the window of our class.

"So what's the reason for Ray? "said Manda in a spoiled tone to find out my reason.

"Ok, so like Man, my goal is to make the title of the second point is because in my opinion the most important thing to fix your writing is the use of appropriate punctuation."

"Yes, you're the same" I said, returning her smile with a smile.

Manda then asked me again about the third point of the note I made for him. He then said to me :

"Ok Ray, you can continue to explain what you mean by this third point, the plot of the story is easy to guess what it means? "he said in a pleading tone while pointing towards the third point written on the note.

I then slightly looked back at the note pointed by Manda, after seeing it I then looked back at Manda and began to say :

"Oh that means this is Man, so if I think the main core of the story you write can be guessed by the readers even when just reading the initial pages" I explained in a patient tone.

"So that's it, how dong dong solution Ray? "said Manda in a pitiful tone asking for my advice.

"Let's just remember Man, I'm sure if you read more references to cases in detective novels or mysteries, I'm sure, surely you can make a case that can make the reader confused and curious to read your work." said me in a friendly tone to give support to Manda.

"Hemm, so Ray is like I still lack references anyway." said Manda realized the shortcomings.

"It's still a passion to read novels again yes" I said to give Manda the spirit to read more references.

"Oh yes Ray, speaking of references this week there is a year-end book bazaar event, right in the Bulbulan Mall, you already know? "

"Hi Man, who have you forgotten who I am? "

"Huh, forgot how Ray means what do you mean ? "

"Duh, I'm a lover of light novels, the time of the event is so rich that I don't know anyway."

"Oh, is it every year end you always there Ray ?"said Manda by showing a plain face want to know.

"Don't ask again Man, the answer is really even alone." I said with a cocky tone at the beginning and sad at the end while lowering my head.

"What if we go there with Ray, you want to hang out?"manda said enthusiastically offering me to go to the event together.

"HAH!, per... go ba.... reng there Man? "my words stammered with shock at hearing the offer from Manda.

"Yes, it's wrong if I take you there together? "asked Manda in an astonished tone at my behavior.

"I don't mean to refuse Man, but later if anyone sees us both there how? "i said in a nervous tone while explaining the truth of the situation to Manda.

"Hmm.. You really are also Ray, if that's what I will use disguise deh."

"Hah!, what disguise? "my confused speech heard the idea from Manda.

"Yes, you see for yourself on Sunday, it means that I will take you home, right? ."

"Neither bother to pick me up Man, we meet at the Orchid Park at nine in the morning."

"Ok, if that's what you want we will meet Sunday in the Orchid Garden ya."

"Yes, later I will try to be on time to come there, you also do not be late. "

"Every Ray, if so thank you for your invitation yes." said Manda with a happy tone while smiling sweetly at me.